Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some studies have revealed that many teenagers have a tendency to be in favor of communicating through social network, thereby face-to-face interaction becomes less prevalent today. In this essay, I would like to discuss causes of this evoled phenomenon and analyse proper solutions that enable teenagers to take part in in-person communication.
As a matter of fact, the continuious development of technology that improves human life significantly is put down to deterioration in meeting person-to-person. It cannot be denied that technology inventions such as smart phone, laptop and macbook help people reduce time consumption considerably but some seem to abuse this convenience. Teenagers are more and more immerse themselves in their smart phones to text with many friends everywhere. In other words, they are too lazy to go outside and are stuck in syndrom called nomophobia, which leads to inevitably knock-on effects on health such as short-sightedness. Thus, the major reason that causes this negative trend is the laziness and short of motivation of teenagers.
As a result, the need to identifying solutions that solves this case should be taken into consideration to enhance interaction in person. As far as I am concerned, firstly, it is necessary to introduce specific clubs for teenagers to exchange interests as well as passion amongst those who are on the same wavelength. In turn, not only do teenagers enjoy their hobbies but they also have an opportunity to improve physical health by activities outside. Secondly, spychologically, it is probable that the scale of feeling afraid will increase providing that there are some warning or advicesory about detrimental consequence caused by overuse of online socialisation. For instance, there are several deceptions having occurred via the Internet, which leads to serve consequences such as loosing money or love tricking.
In conclusion, it had better be taken action to find efficient method so that teenagers can communicate in person.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'need to identify'?
Suggestion: need to identify
...otivation of teenagers As a result the need to identifying solutions that solves this case should ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32692307692 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05424333786 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644230769231 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 312.0 20.2975951904 1537% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1662.0 106.682146367 1558% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 312.0 20.7667163134 1502% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 163.0 7.06120827912 2308% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209166295629 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.209166295629 0.084324248473 248% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121633607471 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0109308580515 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 159.7 13.0946893788 1220% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -262.12 50.2224549098 -522% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 127.3 11.3001002004 1127% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.11 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 24.07 8.58950901804 280% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 63.0 9.78957915832 644% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 126.8 10.1190380762 1253% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 127.0 10.7795591182 1178% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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