Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Today we live in a globalized world with the developed technology, which we benefit from it to improve our life. However, many studies still see the concern of over-reliance on these technologies. Especially to teenagers, with an unmutual personalities they may be influenced by the inappropriate content or people on the internet. To me, I think letting teenagers to social online is not a right way to help them to build a healthy friendship with others.
The content on the internet sometimes can be too sensitive for teenagers. We cannot perfectly filter those content which may lead teenagers to believe something is not true or influences their personality unconsciously. Some teenagers with the lack of education or from a broken family could be targets to those bad people on the internet. Besides, it is clearly unhealthy if a teenager whose friends are mostly from the internet rather than in the real life, because this could result in the abnormal personality of escaping from the reality.
Although there are a lot of downsides of socialing online for teenagers, we should not give them a terrible impression of making friends online. Since the internet can build a connection between people in a very short time, we may not waste this opportunity to explore this world. A best example is that many people nowadays are learning languages online. These learners are not only improving their language skills but also meeting new people around the world. Making friends online is not a bad thing, it helps us broaden our horizons and let us connect to this world.
My opinion is clear that if a mutual individual who has properly educated is always encouraged to have a friendship online. Although I do not think that socialing online is appropriate for teenagers , however, I do believe that one day we will make this society better than ever so that it can be another option for teenagers to make new friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'personality'?
Suggestion: personality
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Suggestion:
...is clearly unhealthy if a teenager whose friends are mostly from the internet rat...
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Suggestion: The
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, still, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95679012346 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80989628986 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552469135802 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4145188433 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.066666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225484019213 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662628952161 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507340376031 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134275054234 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434847499048 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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