Many people claim that advertisements of businesses usually concentrate on new products. I totally disagree with this statement because of two main reasons which are incentivizing people to purchase their products subconsciously to make more money and impact adversely to the economy.
To begin with, many businesses have encouraged people to purchase their latest products through advertising. To be more specific, the manufacturing market has been saturated, many businesses are inclined to gain more customers, who subconsciously buy new products through advertisements, to generate more revenue. For example, Apple, which is a technology company from the USA, has introduced their new products annually through advertisements, which are designed with unique and breath-taking scenes of the products to easily deceive customers to purchase the products.
Furthermore, advertising businesses may force the economy to suffer from economic crisis. Advertising has contributed greatly to consumerism, which encourages consumers to purchase latest products that outweighs products from many brands. For instance, the USA experienced an economic crisis in 2008 due to excessive advertisements which encouraged people to buy products excessively. As a result, the price of items dropped dramatically and the number of products from the US declined considerably, which degraded the economy of many countries in the world.
In conclusion, the negative reasons of advertising businesses are more significant. Advertising may not only incentivize people to purchase subconsciously but also contribute negatively to economic crisis. Moreover, businesses can enhance their product quality that consumers would be inclined to buy their goods without advertisements.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'purchase the latest'.
Suggestion: purchase the latest
...sumerism, which encourages consumers to purchase latest products that outweighs products from m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1514.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.056 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36213265651 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2298740971 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.166666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230333433448 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987562271738 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443660945643 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16137356172 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476157631391 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.8 50.2224549098 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.87 12.4159519038 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'purchase the latest'.
Suggestion: purchase the latest
...sumerism, which encourages consumers to purchase latest products that outweighs products from m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1514.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.056 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36213265651 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2298740971 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.166666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230333433448 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987562271738 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443660945643 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16137356172 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476157631391 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.8 50.2224549098 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.87 12.4159519038 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.