When choosing a job the salary is the most important consideration To what extent do you agree or disagree

When it comes to picking a profession, many people put the most emphasis on the size of the salary offered. Although I acknowledge that salary is unquestionably critical, I believe that other issues are equally vital. In this essay, I will demonstrate my point of view.
On the one hand, almost all people can not demur that money plays a significant role in job selection. To begin with, money represents an employers’ qualification. It denotes that if a person's total annual income is large when compared to low-paid workers, there will be no mistake about how well-qualified and productive he is; the level of wage recognizes either their capacity or their effort. Henceforth, some recruiting managers take it for granted that they would be able to find appropriate opponents hastily. Almost everyone, when considering applying for a job, seems to see how much money they can make per month whether it is high or not. Another argument is that there is still a strong correlation between the size of a person’s salary and their level of happiness. Nowadays, with the rising living standards and cost of living, people need to overwork to earn a reasonable amount of salary that they use to address their desires for comfort, fashion, and food; in other words, the monthly payment of a workforce helps to home finance throughout the industrial age and stimulate their living standard . For some people ,they appear to feel secure in terms of getting a protective amount of money so they could make savings and spent it on other investments while maintaining prosperous life. Admittedly, doctors and lawyers, for example, which earn a good salary, attract numerous applications annually. Nonetheless, some other people are likely to opt for their job with passion, such as teachers or artists. Paradoxically, they regularly do not have enough money to meet their basic needs. What is more, one’s salary is very often a determinant of one’s social standing because in the perspective of many people, a person’s success, to a large extent, depends upon the size of their salary.

Other factors, on the other hand, I believe, are just as imperative as how much money we make at our employment. To begin with, people should select a job which is relevant to their abilities or advantages. For example, students who get high marks in art are more likely to become artists in the near future. Thirdly, on a mental level, when selecting a job, personal relationships and the atmosphere in the workplace have a profound influence. They prefer to work in an environment that is not too harsh. Thus having a good manager or amicable coworkers, for example, can make an immense difference in workers' happiness and quality of life, eradicate stress while working. Next, many people's feelings of job satisfaction are based on their professional feats, the skills they learn, and the position they achieve, rather than the money they can earn. Eventually, some people choose a career because they want to help others and make a positive contribution to society.
In conclusion, salary can play a radical role in people's decision to pursue a career. It is determined by their preferences, hobbies, conditional work, and other factors. People should thoroughly consider those elements so that they do not come to regret making the incorrect decision.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, nonetheless, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with, what is more, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2798.0 1615.20841683 173% => OK
No of words: 553.0 315.596192385 175% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05967450271 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83079225126 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 176.041082164 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55877034358 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 880.2 506.74238477 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9860437417 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.615384615 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2692307692 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110397816601 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032182881729 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341178318749 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0762821251524 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246722200916 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 78.4519038076 199% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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