Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
In some museums visitors have to pay a fee for admission. Below some advantages and disadvantages of this approach will be discussed.
To begin with, idea of taking money for visiting has many merits but probably the most obvious will be that artists and museums have a possibility to finance their activities. In this case, artists may be truly independent from constrains that could be imposed by sponsors. Moreover, some believe that those who pay for admission will be appreciating the art work more deeply and more thoughtfully because act of paying will likely motivate them to try to get something out of the purchased visit.
However, all pros are balanced by some cons and some individuals, in particular, those who do not have a stable income may not be able to see the masterpieces that are exhibited for money. Consequently, many of those who might have enjoyed the arts will be deprived of it. Moreover, pupils and students who perhaps may get the most benefits out of visiting museums may not have enough finances as well. Those are a few disadvantages that should be mentioned.
Finally, in my opinion neither option is perfect and only balanced approach when adults are charged a full price and children, young people and elderly are allowed inside for free or for an insignificant fee seems to have no conspicuous drawbacks but preserves all mentioned merits. For instance, Moscow National Art Museum that is situated near the Kremlin charges one thousand and five hundred rubles per person. This amount is relatively large for an average Russian, but only adults and foreigners pay the full fee whereas pupils, college and university students as well as senior citizens may enjoy the exhibition without paying because Russian government subsidizes their tickets. As a result, the museum has still been making money to be relatively independent and those who cannot pay for themselves have still visited it.
To sum up, neither policy is perfect but combination of both may get all advantages without disadvantages.
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The essay topic actually didn't ask a solution. Also a balanced solution is not a good idea for IELTS essays. Better to just support one side but discuss two side.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 336 350
No. of Characters: 1664 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.281 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.952 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.694 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.576 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, whereas, for instance, in particular, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09226190476 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77343747505 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.8783339954 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.214285714 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 7.06120827912 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17196996495 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647598261214 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402871775759 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987699156342 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466094475027 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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