Doctors in many countries are saying that people are not getting enough physical exercises. What do you think about the cause of this problem? How can you address this?

Nowadays, many people are not doing physical activities due to which doctors are really concerned. This trend is mainly due to the scarcity of parks and a hectic lifestyle. However, there are a number of measures that could be implemented in order to resolve this health issue.

One of the core reasons why people are not indulging themselves in physical exercise is the lack of open spaces and public parks. In many metropolitan areas, people usually spend most of their time indoor as they don’t have well-maintained parks. A good illustration of this is China, where Shanghai has the largest population due to which they are running out of the land, as a result, the government doesn’t have enough space to construct public lawns or parks. Consequently, many people are restricted to remain inside the home boundaries.

Another reason might be advanced indoor game options. Many people prefer to play video games and virtual reality games in order to entertain themselves, whereas previously, many people used to visit the parks to meet their friends and doing some exercise. Moreover, many people are working round the clock these days for their safe future due to which they are not getting enough time for physical exercise. Take an IT engineer as an example, who does the sitting job more than 12 hours a day and hence, having many health problems due to a sedentary lifestyle.

There are a number of ways this problem can be resolved. First, the government must issue health advisories regularly to teach everyone about the benefits of health and ways to improve it. By understanding the value of health, people might leave their indoor entertainment sources and move out for exercises. Also, the government can plan the architecture of the cities in a way that people may have public lawns around their homes with greenery. As a result, they may spend more time in the parks to get fresh air and do some physical exercise.

In conclusion, scarcity of lands and advanced indoor entertainment sources are the reasons why many people are not doing physical exercise. However, only when the government initiate health awareness programs and plan some dedicates spots for the parks, will this situation be remedied.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, well, whereas, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06486486486 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67010613348 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513513513514 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4587927429 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.111111111 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226859418175 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770113428631 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459535475407 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137174640993 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258103375472 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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