Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.To what extent do yo u agree with this statement?

There is an opinion that investing money in the entertainment industry such as music and theatre is unnecessary, instead, the higher officials should look after the public services. I agree with the latter view that the government must lay out money on public services such as transportation, and health sectors so that the population may be benefited.

It is the fundamental duty of the government to look after their public basic needs such as proper transportation facilities as almost more than half of the population depends on them on a daily basis. To elaborate, many people are working these days and are dependent on public transport like trains or buses to commute safely. Recent demographics in Telangana, India has shown that buses have gained large-sum of money in the past 6 months as 75% of the population travel on them for various purposes for which the government has increased the number of bus facilities.

Admittedly, investing in the healthcare sector is equally important because, people nowadays are suffering from various health-related diseases such as diabetes, obesity, and many more for which we could admit a large number of deaths every year. To have proper treatment there should be the availability of government hospitals where people could be cured at minimal prices as they do not have enough money to invest in costly medicines. I believe that if the government does not spend funds on hospitals, the health of our society may decline. For instance, if a hospital has advanced types of equipment, it can detect the diseases at early stages which results in a lower mortality rate. Therefore, having invested in such sectors could be beneficial not only to the government but also to the public.

To conclude, I profoundly believe that the government should invest huge funds in public needs such as hospitals, schools, and transportation systems rather than the entertainment sector where there is less benefit obtained after investment.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... and many more for which we could admit a large number of deaths every year. To have proper treat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, therefore, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18691588785 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90311257375 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548286604361 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.2933536163 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.363636364 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1818181818 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268504516699 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106114981805 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743965819373 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175500972102 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884753235927 0.056905535591 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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