Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Some people think that music is beneficial in uniting people with different age and cultural background. I fully agree with this opinion that music is good in connecting all people with various cultures and age backgrounds.

Firstly, music is one of the art forms. Art can be appreciated by anyone, including by those who have different backgrounds from the artists. For instance, a lot of young people love listening to Rock n' Roll, which was popular in the 1950s, where some older people fond of listening to Electronic music which is known as today's music. When they gather together through music community or music concert, they will connect easily because they have same interests/

Secondly, music is usually written carefully and earnestly by the artists. It often carries a message, and often being used to communicate something, including to unite people. For the example, a song entitled "Heal the World" by Michael Jackson was written to encourage people to unite and make a world as a better place, something which many have forgotten to do. Millions of people with different backgrounds understood the message and were touched, then finally decided to improve the situation of this world.

To conclude, I strongly agree that music is useful in bringing lot of people from various backgrounds because it can be appreciated by anyone, and it can communicate a message to unite people.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 422, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ons of people with different backgrounds understood the message and were touched,...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1185.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15217391304 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72883157031 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552173913043 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 369.9 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8716370089 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344432110219 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144769628824 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136121290493 0.0667982634062 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22853486088 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161766413467 0.056905535591 284% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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