It is believed that government should take a responsibility to give money to artists and musicians while others think there might be several options from elsewhere. In my opinion, renowned artists can earn money easily by other ways, therefore government should focus more on health.
Nowadays promoting arts has become more convenient than decades ago as we have access to Internet where we can share all kind of art work and songs. Moreover, people are addicted to use online services which is beneficial for creative people who are working with computer. For example, my classmate who has practised art for years is now professional digital artist and famous with her work in different countries, earning money from online followers. A numerous of people have gained fame through Youtube channel by just recording and downloading their songs. Followers can share and like these songs, which spreads around the world and eventually can create a celebrity overnight.
Governments responsibility is mainly to concentrate on people needs in wellbeing instead of supporting a small group of people who are working on creative occupations. This would increase a big issue in publicity as they are the one who are paying the taxes. In contrast, we need better facilities for hospitals and more professional surgery doctors which is mostly government job to deal with. For example, in Estonia are lack of doctors who can deal with skin cancers, last year lots of people were suffering in this sickness and had to travel another countries to get help.
In conclusion, artists need to build up a group of followers and can sell their work easily from online. It is not government responsibility to fund creative artists as main priorities are people health and wellbeing.
- Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday.Write a letter to your friends. In your letter• thank them for the photos and for the holiday• explain why you didn’t write 73
- An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in a developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation? 61
- Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? 78
- Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? 56
- Your local newspaper wants to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter:suggest someone who deserves the rewardmention what they have done to help the communitysay what reward you would li 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78387351988 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9153017373 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.461538462 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204773199834 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806647042703 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904931837623 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1493751327 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960042293133 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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