While some people contemplating that setting constant retirement age for all, irrespective of occupation is unjust to society. Whilst, they support the implementation of the law which favors certain workers who are strongly eligible to relieve at an early age as well as desirable to receive benefits which are provided by the ministry of government. In my perspective, I partially agree that people who have been serving their profession in a hazardous environment should receive the benefits and also voluntary retirement with a considerable amount.
On the one hand, the nature of some profession is entirely based on physical and mental involvement. As a result, most people get boredom and fatigue in their work. According to the statistics, 97% of people are getting affected by new diseases and most of them are aged between 25-30. To extend the details of this result, the workers who pursue a career in Nuclear Power Plants are young in Indonesia. The record describes until 2019, 35% of workers have been died due to the effect of negative rays which is emitted in the Nuclear pipes. So, the Indonesian government has decided to give voluntary retirement based on their medical report and provided the privilege to access government services.
However, this does not mean that everybody has to get retirement at an early age. Except for physical workers, people who work in a government service such as teaching, government hospital doctors, administration offices. Most of them are having lesser work than the people who are serving in the same government job which involves full of physical effort. So, the higher authorities have to segregate the workers based on their nature of the job and give priorities to those who have affected more to retire as well as a pension service.
To put it in a nutshell, it is apparent that, some people should get retirement at an early age depends on the category of a field which they have been working. I hope, the government has to make static age limit for certain profession and design new legislation as soon as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, well, while, as to, except for, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0144092219 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8012238935 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504322766571 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0685064523 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297350450723 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993338291352 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709816904713 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200625608079 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726508713648 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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