Today our lifestyle is changing rapidly and affects family relationships. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is believed that there is an abrupt change in the life style of people in almost in every domain, be it communication, travel, health and psychology. Consequently, the lifestyle is influencing the relationships of family in both positive and negative manner. In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of life style on family relationships.
On the one hand, the life style changes are primarily seen in both communication and travel. Firstly, the technology improved the communication between family members and one can reach out their immediate family and other relatives in matter of seconds over internet and mobile phone. For example, people living abroad away from their parents can stay in touch almost every day with the help of audio and video calling facilities of mobile phones. Secondly, the people can travel to any remote part of the world using various modes of transportation such as improved road, rail and air facilities. Presently, anybody can reach any place in few days, unlike few months earlier. In turn, this helps in maintaining healthy relationships between family members as they can be physically and mentally available to others.
On the other hand, families are adopting unhealthy practices both physically and psychologically. This is mostly due to the changing life style choices accessible for people. For instance, people are increasingly dependent on fast food, which is causing conflicts between elder and younger family members as there is a disagreement over what is healthy and what unhealthy. Further, the present generation is hurrying to reach the financial stability early in their career. With the availability of home and car loans in a quicker way, they are buying houses and cars in a hurried manner. However , this is putting lots of financial burden on their shoulders and there is always a risk of not re-paying the loan if the job is lost. Elders of family are against this tendency as this would put the younger generation under tremendous stress and pressure.
To conclude, it can be seen clearly that the plus points of increased family relationships is seen with the positive changes in communication and travel. Also, people can choose to abandon the junk food as well as their bad financial practices, which is under their control.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2192513369 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89896962538 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526737967914 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.900608435 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.444444444 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72222222222 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131313528779 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047811151045 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728830666697 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979591433214 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805251947219 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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