Writing Task 2 (an essay)
Some people say that not all criminals should be sent to prison. Instead they should do unpaid work to help people in the community. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.
Most criminals spend not months but years in prison, and if they are not productively used it is both a wastage of precious human resource and waste of government's time and money. I believe all prisoners need to be engaged in activities that benefit them as well as the community.
Though almost all criminals are in jail for some sort of offence (crime), many have never committed a monstrous crime. While some spend time in jail for theft, others are there due to dire circumstances. These people need support from the society and system to emerge out of their lives’s crisis. This can only be done if they are engaged in productive activities such as making utensils that are beneficial to the community.
Furthermore, criminals, even hardened ones, need second chance rectify their mistakes. To create a society that uses the principle of harmony, we need to give an opportunity to criminals to become useful for the community. This cannot be done by keeping them to imprisonment. This can only be done by making them feel that they are useful for the society.
Researchers have proven that those prisoners who are engaged in productive activities such as making furniture, welding metals, growing vegetables, etc. not only have better chances of surviving once they are released from prison, but also have a more constructive mindset. Even one of the jail in my town sell snacks cooked by prisoners to give a meaning to their lives and now that snacks are very famous in my town.
To put in a nutshell, working for the benefit of society helps in prisoner rehabilitation and allowing them to become contributing members of the society. Though these activities are mostly unpaid, they are beneficial both for the society as well as criminals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 240, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...hey are beneficial both for the society as well as criminals.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, so, well, while, sort of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9527027027 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74659461108 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516891891892 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7979674167 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15813203846 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553865956506 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284125978992 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912355278598 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240557946339 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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