Nowadays, technological advancements make a lot of changes in people's lives. At any moment, there is a change occurs in the world, which effects the way that people live. Sometimes, these changes make life much easier for people and sometimes they don't. In this regard, there is a controversy among people regarding the world's changing and its impacts on people's lives. A popular belief in this regard is that people now are less happier and less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past, whereas the other group of people have a complete opposite view about this idea. Personally, I agree with the latter. In the ensuing lines, I will attempt to substantiate this idea through 2 reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that technological advancements, such as internet, facilitate the way that people live. People can get informed about what is going on around the world and be in contact with their relatives by using the internet. In 100 years ago, people were secluded. They rarely had this chance to get informed regarding events happening around the world. Also, If they wanted to be in contact with their relatives, who were living in another city, they had to write them a letter and wait for several months to receive its response. However, thanks to the technology, the way that people live now are quite different from the past. Nowadays, internet has facilitated the way that people get information. They can read all news regarding the world only by one click in the internet. Also, they are not secluded anymore. They can share their thoughts and videos with hundreds of people at a same time through social networks. Besides, They can be in contact with their relatives in other cities and countries much easier than the past. They don't have to wait for their letter's response for several months. When they send their letter via email to their friends and families, they can receive its response a couple of hours later. In addition, they can be in contact with their friends and families in the internet by following them in the social networks, such as facebook, instagram, or twitter. Hence, people now are much happier with their lives than the past.
The second reason which deserves some words here is that people can travel throughout the world much easier. Today, there is no limitation for people to travel. In 100 years ago, the transportation systems were not very advanced as they are today. If people wanted to go to another city, they had to use horse and camel. They often were several months in the roads, which was very dangerous owing to the fact that they might be robbed during their journey by thieves. That being said, by invention of cars and air planes, the way that people travel is quite different from the past. The transportation systems have changed completely, so that traveling is more enjoyable for people. Nowadays, they can go to other cities and countries much easier. By using cars, people can travel to short distances with their friends and families. They can have a lot of fun during the trip and enjoy from the view. Their trip is much safer than the past owing to the fact that roads have improved from the past and there are a considerable number of police stations. Also, by using air planes, people can travel to other countries. Traveling by air planes would be an enjoyable experience for people, because they can make comfortable in their seats, put on their headsets, and listen to their favorite music during the trip. In addition, they arrive to their destinations faster. Thus, people now are more satisfied with their lives than they were in the past.
To put it all in a nutshell, world's changes have a lot of effects on people's lives. Unlike the past, people are not secluded anymore. They can get informed regarding what is happening in the world and be in contact with their relatives and other people throughout the world by using the internet. Also, they way that people are traveling now is much easier and faster than the past. Cars and airplanes help people to experience enjoyable trips in their lives and as a result, people now are more satisfied and much happier with their lives than they were in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Line 1, column 426, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less happy'?
Suggestion: less happy
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...untries much easier than the past. They dont have to wait for their letters response...
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Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were often
..., they had to use horse and camel. They often were several months in the roads, which was ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 15.1003584229 258% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 116.0 52.1666666667 222% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3493.0 1977.66487455 177% => OK
No of words: 730.0 407.700716846 179% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78493150685 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.19793345208 4.48103885553 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40652807362 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.375342465753 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1052.1 618.680645161 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 42.0 20.6003584229 204% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.670204198 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1666666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.69047619048 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 19.0 4.88709677419 389% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424255583342 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126118382628 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112444597946 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.343498567311 0.150856017488 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921757378522 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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