A job is a vital part of our life. Nowadays, there are variety of available occupations that people could be interested in. The harsh capitalist system is widespread across the world and gives no choices to employees but one standard option. Therefore, some may think about how would be if there was another option that employees were required to work 3 days with longer work hours instead of working 5 days with shorter work hours. I, however, hold the opposite idea and shall discuss the underlying reasons of my opinion.
First and foremost, people need to be engaged in varied activities either during the day or other time periods in order to enjoy life. In order to earn money, working is necessary or going to a movie theatre or having a picnic with family or friends is vital to have fun and release daily stress. I believe that people can only enjoy life by spreading these activities across the day, week or month. On the other hand, if people work 3 days with longer work hours, their job would be exhausting during workdays resulting in not enjoying the day and allocating time for other activities. Resting in work off days would also be boring because of doing the same activities. As a result, five days option would be more practical and offer a more colorful life.
To draw attention to an interesting point, I would like to mention a personal career. It is proved by scientists that exceeding a certain work hour reduces the performance of the employees. The human anatomy, of course, has limits and should not be pushed to be productive. There might be countless people who want to advance in their career however, how it could be possible if they could not be productive and make contributions to their company. I have read an interview with a businessman in an economy magazine saying that in order to accelerate personal development, current work hours was the most suitable.
In conclusion, I pen down saying that there might be some opponents to my belief but I am of the opinion that working 5 days with shorter work hours is the best option for people. This is because they can enjoy life more and, advancing in a personal career is easier with this option.
- TOEFL TPO 21 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts 61
- Do you agree or disagree? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Provide examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO-23 - Integrated Writing Task Populations of the yellow cedar, a species of tree that is common in northwestern North America, have been steadily declining for more than a century now, since about 1880. Scientists have advanced several hypotheses expla 85
- Young people enjoy life more than older people do.Do you agree or disagree? 60
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, of course, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7109375 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55338906861 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526041666667 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0583577643 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252604282574 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789980739994 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713191236588 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161495816682 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067367770283 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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