Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The epoch invention of television has affected the human's lifestyle in many ways. Some people hold a positive perspective toward these effects, while others think that lives before television were absolutely better. In my opinion, the disadvantages of television and movies are bolder than their advantages, especially for youth. I will explore my point of view in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, companies which contribute to make movies, try to grab the young people's attention through their attractive products, and apparently, they have been thrived. Young people consume so much time watching television and movies, which leads to a kind of addiction. In fact, we are witnessing many families that are involved with the challenge of prohibiting television. My personal experience is a compelling example of what I mean. Last year, my younger brother had a tough time struggling with my parents about use of TV. He was addicted watching movies and instead of studying his lessons, he sat as a potato coach, watching TV programs. Consequently, his exams' results become terrible. My parents got a help from a Psychologist to avoid my brother continuing his behavior. This example demonstrates how TV could be hurtful for adolescents.
Furthermore, children’s eyesight is very vulnerable, and being in the exposure of TV and LED monitors will aggregate their vision. As a result, they might wear glasses, which is unacceptable for majority of them. Specifically, vain teenagers who care a lot about their appearances are more rigid about use of glasses. They think their friends may ridicule them. For instance, a friend of mine had weak eyesight, exactly owing to her inappropriate habit of watching TV. Thus, she should have worn glasses, but she used to conceal them, because she thinks that it did not suit her, and had very hard time dealing with her difficulty of seeing the blackboard in our classes. Likewise, she suffered from headache all the time, and got tired of study. All of these outcomes are caused by the adverse influence of using TV.
To recap, I firmly believe that despite of many benefits, that television and movies may have, their negative effects on youth is more noticeable. Addiction to watch TV could worsen children's efficiency in their schools. In addition, their eyesight will be hurt from watching TV for a long period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, furthermore, if, likewise, may, so, thus, while, for instance, i mean, in addition, in fact, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14248704663 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85635243417 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608808290155 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7535640334 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7083333333 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0833333333 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147803365418 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378504096105 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447797035628 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938081838493 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285366702166 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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