There is a belief that is constantly mentioned: movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Movies and televisions captivate vision with fancy movements and do not play a good role in the growth of a child's brain. Now let me explain these reasons.
To begin with, movies and televisions have many scenes that are hard to see in everyday life such as flying people and doing magic. These, have scene that is transformed into a different actions fancy graphics are used. Thus, when children watch the television, they are caught in front of the screen by the exciting motion. They can’t stop watching television. For example, parents and children promised to watch TV for only one hour. But after an hour, the child still wants to watch TV. Therefore, child can cry and be stubborn. Like this, young people cannot stop watching TV.
In addition, movies and televisions shows all the scenes in detail. The emotions of the characters are also expressed as best as a person can. Thus, children can know everything without guessing the situation and the feelings of the characters. This condition is fatal to the child. Imagination is the most important thing for a child. However, this situation prevents a child from developing their imagination. Because imagination can grow by analogy everything through a few things. Like this, movies and television is harmful to child’s growth.
For these reasons, you need to be very careful when you show your child a movie or television. Those have a negative effect on a very important part of a young people.
- TOEFL integrated writing Chevalier de Seingalt 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'action'?
Suggestion: action
...ne that is transformed into a different actions fancy graphics are used. Thus, when chi...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hild from developing their imagination. Because imagination can grow by analogy everyth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 271.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0073800738 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66137372255 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594095940959 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0886378177 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.619047619 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9047619048 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23262714774 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630713168182 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113834445724 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174910387284 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132370682807 0.0645574589148 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.89 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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