Do you agree or disagree with the following statement “ In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.” Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.

I’ve agreed with this idea that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. In this essay, I want to describe my idea, with tree reasons which include, a transfer of experiences to children in order to manage money, an independent person and the value of money, a long term plan for their lives.
First, one of the most important things during life is the issue of transfer experiences from parents to children. Some experiences that can be useful for children contain the management in their money. In the case of finance, parents usually are responsible for the economy of a family then they must know how they spend money. For instance, families must make a balance between costs and incomes, they should say to children buy everything they need and also save the rest of their money. Eventually, parents will manage the budget of their family in the future.
Second, on the one hand, children like to have entertainment when they are at a young age, they waste so much their money. For example, in the pastime when I was a child, I saved my money for three years. I decided to buy some toys for playing with my friends but after I played several times with my friends I threw my toys away, therefore, I lost all of my own money. On the other hand, children in their lives should be independent either they have a lot of money or don’t have money. Therefore, if parents learn to children that they save money, in the future they will decide about their money without helping others and making a decision independently.
Third, I believe that children should learn to manage their own money in order to learn two important things. One thing is that if they know how to use their own money, they will struggle to think about other problems in their lives. Another thing is that children can make a decision in the long-termed plans that are so important for children. Therefore, they learn to keep their lives in the best way.
As a matter of fact, finance and economy are so significant for families, who want to challenge with economic problems such as inflation, economic and financial crisis, unemployed in the world. As a result, parents must prepare their children in order to save money and to manage their expenses. Children should have long-termed plans and also they should learn that doesn’t lose their own money. Because that will be the best point for don’t lose their opportunities and times which are more important them money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, another thing, for example, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71724137931 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45807869658 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420689655172 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4439792617 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301941499218 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125034121676 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104906210811 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217143164071 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736081063382 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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