Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer Be sure to use your own words Do not use memorized examples

Our world has advanced rapidly, allowing modern citizens to live in a safe environment with access to proper education, transportation, luxury items, and other services provided by the government. Despite these advantages, a controversial debate that many argue about is whether it is true that people are spending excessive money on clothing to improve their appearance. People globally hold different and conflicting opinions on this topic, and no one can deny that there are negative and positive aspects to buying clothes and other beauty items to enhance how people look.

Nevertheless, if I had to choose a side, I would affirm that the statement mentioned is accurate. It is my firm belief that society feels the need to spend unlimited money on clothes to appear more attractive for several reasons, which I will develop in the subsequent paragraphs.

First and foremost, spending a lot of money on clothing is not the right mindset for people who balance their finances well. Possessing many dresses is not a basic need. It is mainly a sign of luxury. Spending your hard-earned money on unnecessary things creates considerable financial tension in mediocre households. Moreover, people are aware of the rising prices of commodities these days, so they realize the importance of saving money for necessities. This is best exemplified by my personal experience. I am a graduate student, and my fellowship is not that high. So, I often prefer not to buy clothes until they are necessary because I survive on very little money. I need to cater to my basic requirements like house rent, groceries, an electricity bill, etc. Even if I manage to have a surplus after all these expenses, I tend to save the money for future emergencies that might crop up instead of mindlessly spending it on buying dresses. If I had not been this economical and bought one dress every month, I would have been bankrupt.

On top of that, I believe that dressing up well or wearing a new dress creates a positive impression among people. Contrary to popular belief, wearing a new dress to the office helps you get a promotion and puts you in a better position in everybody's eyes, which is absolute nonsense. You can look presentable and professional by wearing almost the same pair of clothes to the office every day. One needs to be confident and optimistic in one's abilities to hold a position of power and respect. For instance, my father never encouraged anyone in our family to spend money on things unnecessarily. He is a businessman and just had a certain number of shirts, and for many years he wore those shirts to the office every day without planning to buy any new clothes for himself. His colleagues respect him despite this, and he has made significant business deals. Hence, I acknowledge that people nowadays understand that wearing a new dress has nothing to do with a person's social status.

To sum up, I believe that in the present day, people recognize the importance of not spending extravagantly on purchasing new clothes and realize that dressing up well does not hold much significance in terms of who the person is.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, after all, for instance, it is true, to sum up, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2607.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92816635161 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8459129693 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550094517958 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 837.9 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.003076832 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.28 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.16 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140490665005 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358888747374 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354835035792 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0783535842326 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013501894402 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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