Most of the psychologists believe that one of the significant criteria propels individuals to achieve their goals is their uniqueness, in which, they prefer to try new things even with high-risk proportion. I totally agree with this viewpoint that people should search and try new things, and accept the probable risks occurrence on account of many reasons, two of the prominent ones are as follows.
Firstly, encountering the risk of doing new things enhances creativity and knowledge in the investigated problem. Noteworthy, most people remember a person who invents a commodity for the first time. In other words, they only know a person who makes a revolution in his/her experts. To obtain this achievement, we must have innovation in our expertise and promote our knowledge. For instance, one of the well-known entrepreneurs in industrial fields in Iran is Ali Rahmani, who started his work by finding unsolved problems in a machines factory through experts’ judgment and related papers. He states that many specialists knew the problems, but they did not prefer to solve it with probable methods.
Moreover, if an individual wants to be successful, he/she must be much braver than ordinary people, with no hesitation to encounter unpredictable risks. An Iranian proverb says “You will not succeed unless you accept the risk of converting to the new status.” An ultra-conservative person avoids risks, which consequently will not let his/ her potential approach convert to reality. An example of this issue is about flight theory. Almost all of our ancients dreamed of flying like a bird. However, none of them had dared to find a way to do it until an inventor, named Abbas Farnas, made it real. His failures not only did not disappoint him but also made him braver to endeavor harder to try new ways for his aim.
All in All, there are many reasons that can be strong enough to accept the risk of trying new things. I think people will be more successful with this decision which increase their creativity, knowledge, and braveness.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is the best way for teachers to help students become more interested in a subject by explaining how this subject can help students live better outside the school. 73
- Which one do you prefer Why 1 a company offering you a job with challenging and interesting projects but less vacation days or2 another company offering you a job that is not so challenging and interesting but has more vacation days 83
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to use printed material such as books and articles to do research than it is to use the internet. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'risks'' or 'risk's'?
Suggestion: risks'; risk's
...try new things, and accept the probable risks occurrence on account of many reasons, ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'machines'' or 'machine's'?
Suggestion: machines'; machine's
... work by finding unsolved problems in a machines factory through experts' judgment ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 220, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r creativity, knowledge, and braveness.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, i think, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10324483776 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90544149999 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628318584071 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9307258468 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.125 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233199734169 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653316807727 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534566408585 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133438198882 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026823619467 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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