Human relationships are a big part of many people’s worries. That is why there are so many discussion topics about relationships. Among them, this topic that two people can still become good friends if one of them has more money than the other does is very prominent. I disagree with this opinion. I will tell you two big reasons to support my opinion.
To begin with, as the money gap widens, friendships become increasingly uncomfortable. Some people think it is better if one friend has more money. However, if you think about it more deeply, if two friends eat, a rich friend will eat at a fancy restaurant that is at his level, and a friend who does not have money will be very burdened. After they finish eating, rich friends will naturally pay for it. If this happens many times, that friend might feel a little bad because that friend buys every time, and the other friend might feel jealous or have low self-esteem. Like this, even small things make them feel bad about each other, so they are getting estranged. For example, my mom actually said that her friendship with a very rich friend was broken by these little things.
Next, money makes a different conversation too. Usually friends talk on the same subject and talk about it with the same interest. However, when there is a gap in money, the topic of conversation is different because there is interest in different things and the environment in which they live is different. If this happens, one side gets bored when the other side is talking. Then it is getting harder and harder to meet and get farther away. For example, in the drama, one friend was talking about an interview, and the other friend was talking about a luxury bag that she bought yesterday, and then they broke up. LIke this, the money gap separates the conversation topic.
This is why I think two people can still not become good friends if one of them has more money than the other does. It is because the money gap makes them uncomfortable and makes for different conversations. That is why I think money plays a big role in friendship.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
...versation is different because there is interest in different things and the environment...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, so, still, then, for example, i think, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67027027027 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49296453434 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472972972973 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6017616015 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5454545455 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8181818182 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382573954265 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117646458902 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149015558027 0.0737576698707 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279103764449 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107821489498 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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