Going to university change our lives! Looking at the university's money allocation for different societies arise a question; whether same amount of money should be allocated to library and sports society? For me, it is no brainier, that library needs money money and definitely they should be given more money. I have got some reasons to support this idea, and I will explain them with compelling examples.
To start with, library genuinely need substantial amount of money. What happens is every year there is a new edition of almost all the books, in which many new additions are made in accordance with the currents researches and examination styles. It is really important for students that new editions are available in the library as soon as they are available, as students are always on tight budget. Not to mention the fact that these books are extremely expensive. Library also need some money for repairing chair, desks, racks and other stuff. Regarding sports stuff, which is not that expensive, just need some repair once in a while and does not require much budget. I remember, when i used to work as an assistant in library, there were many instances in which i have to go and buy books for the library, the books were very expensive, especially those with new editions.
Another reason to be mentioned here is that, library facilities are utilized by everybody in the campus; whether they are teachers, students, assistants and even by the head of departments. Not only this but library is being used almost all day. So library heating system is working for the whole day. On the other hand gymnasium is used by only few students and for not more than an hour or so. Nobody work out at gymnasium in the afternoon, as it is frequently found locked up after 5 but people study in the library all day long!
So cutting the long story short, library need more finances to keep it going while gymnasium does not need much budget!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, really, regarding, so, while, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76261127596 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49869604716 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545994065282 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9239399769 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135453575445 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496145944449 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046910117308 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.08113710318 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760453455744 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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