The desire to excel in life is an act that most people would wish to achieve because, as human's there is that tendency to live a life that is free from hardship and it live a life that is enjoyable most especially in terms of having basic requirement of our daily needs. The stimuli avert that success is primarily as result of hard work and not fortune. I most likely agree to the above statement because of three reasons.
First of all, every action taken has a way of affecting an individual either positively or negatively. For instance, if I want to be a medical doctor, I need to pass all my courses with good grades. That would be a step to offer me such an opportunity; but, if I relax as student of medicine and surgery, I am at the edge of making a big mistake because medical practice is an act that requires rigorous and consistent efforts. And I can only attain my desired wish of becoming a doctor, if and only if I study hard. Hence, given and take, my studies determines my level of success and not staying idle without serious studies.
Secondly, some people are fortunate given that their are already from rich families. For example, I know of a friend of mine who literally do not pay attention in classroom, but after our graduation from high school, he got the best of jobs that fetched him more money than most of us who were his classmates. When we eventually asked him to show us how he earned his money he categorically told us that my fortune pays me off. In such a scenario, one could out rightly say that sometimes because of luck one is able to excel and not basically as a result of hard work as some people perceive it.
Thirdly, sometimes one needs hard work as well as luck. Why am I saying this? I am a product of both instances because when I applied for a scholarship in the US, I tried my best to meet up with all the required grades, but at the same time I needed some luck to fall at my side knowing fully well that there other people who were far better off than myself. And luckily for me, I was privileged to be granted the scholarship. But deep within me, I knew it was the product of hard work as well as being fortunate that made me get the scholarship award.
To conclude, I most likely agree that that success is entirely the product of hard work given that: Ones actions tells of what result he/she would get, some people are naturally lucky, and at some point, both hard work and luck could sometimes go along with each other.
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- TOEFL ESSAY Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Subjects such as art music and drama should be a part of every child s basic education 73
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lives'?
Suggestion: lives
... life that is free from hardship and it live a life that is enjoyable most especiall...
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Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...y, some people are fortunate given that their are already from rich families. For exa...
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Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...han most of us who were his classmates. When we eventually asked him to show us how ...
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Line 9, column 101, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: One's
...ly the product of hard work given that: Ones actions tells of what result he/she wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, for example, for instance, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35053763441 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40989404678 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.7893058833 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.388888889 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8333333333 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186463797246 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566435587187 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483717551826 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105371676854 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410411888852 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.25 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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