There is no gainsyaing that technology has a crucial role in human beings' lives and the great majority of people spend hours on technology. Anyway, some people believe that advant of the technology has adverse effects on poeple's lives especially on children education, on the contrary some other people refuse this idea. There is no doubt that the chidrens' edcuation are effected by three sources: shcools, families and friends. From my perspective, technology has negetive impacts on children education via these three sources. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate my points of view.
First exquisite point to be mentioned is that, technology propses some advance ways for schools to educate the children, but most of the students most of their time for using self devices and has no concentration on teachers' materilas. In better word, with the advant of the technology like lap tops and vidio projectors, teachers are capable to utilize these devices for improving the class efficiency. howeover, the great majority of students use some devices like cell phone and check their social networks during the classes, since cell phones distrac not only the user but also other students and teachers. Therefore, schools know that some advice has adverse effect on education.
Second point that come to my mind is that, most of the families have problems with their children for using the technology. It is undeniable that most of the families spend their time with cell phone and social networking and they do not attach much importance to their families. In better words, these days, most of the families do not eat dinner with together. Famlies members including children and parents cannot distach themselves from cell phone and they always stick to their cell phone, there fore they spend less time with each other. Furthermore, they do not spend enough time to take care each other and talk about their problems, interests, experiences and etc. Hencen, undoubtedly techonogy has destrutive effects on the parents and childrens relationships and these weak relationships and bonds engender crucial problems for children educating.
Last but not least, there is no doubt that friends have a pivotal role in childrens' lives. In other words, children spend an enormous portion of their time with their friends and they learn many things from each others. Thesedays, most of the children just talk with some people that they are not in their neighbourhoods via social networks. In this respect, they have no profound knowledge about their friends and they just know them via internets. This kind of frinendship is so dangerous for children. For example, my cousin spent a lot of time on Facebook and she made frindship with a young boy, of course he way a 50 years man with a young boy accout. He has some plan for ubsing my cousin, but her parents found one day and saves thier duaghter.
In conclusion, contemplating all aforemenitoned paragraphs, the technology has several adverse effects on children edcationg, since they spend less time with theri families, they have less concentration on their schools and they might jeopradize their lives via some dangerous friendships.
- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO 49- Independent writingDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 60
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- TPO33-Integrated 76
- Essay topics: TPO 45- independent writing taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their o 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: etc.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, furthermore, hence, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt, of course, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2673.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17021276596 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64537584972 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471953578337 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5062520589 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.217391304 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4782608696 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86956521739 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189593978235 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624750675481 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589907479567 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113418561119 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594057230372 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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