There is no doubt that every student wants to succeed in the future. Some people say social skill is the crucial factor in achieving this accomplishment, while others think that studying hard is most important. From my perspective, the ability to relate well to people cannot outweigh the hard working.
Firstly, the social ability does help students for their future career success, but the knowledge and skills of his major is a fundamental factor. When people review a successful person in our society, they turn to attribute the success to that person's social connection instead of his hard working. For example, people always suggest that the Facebook CEO Mark Zarkberge's remarkable success of building the Social Network empire is due to his excellent relationship to the investors in Solidcon Valley. Those investors have indeed given him numerous money, which is essential for him to expand territory, but before he dropped out of Harford, he studied very hard and learned all he can learn in college. Besides, he started to use what he learned to build up the Facebook website when he in college. Without this hard work, this is no Facebook empire in the future.
Secondly, social skills can use as a shortcut for pursuing success, but this success cannot last long. As the lifestyle be faster and faster in the modern society, people are more eager to succeed, and there is no exception for students in school. Recently, there was a scandal that some parents sent their children to Harford by giving money to the officer for the college administration even though their children are not qualified. These students seem successful, but without hard working, they may not catch up with the courses and end up without a promising future.
Thirdly, the ability of learning can benefit a student for his future success in the long term.
The primary duty of a student is to study well in his major. Those students who have solid major backgrounds can more easy to find a good job. What is more, as we all know, students still need to learn much new stuff in their future work. Those students who work hard in school and has more strong learning ability can be more capable of the working environment so that they can be successful in the long run.
In conclusion, students should work hard in school to gain a strong professional foundation for his future career and polish his learning ability at first. Only after that, he should focus on building his social skills.
- TPO-20 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO-20 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 83
- The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books. We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because 55
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89099526066 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51455188496 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5504116337 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.2 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209430190706 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709753259003 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444154221307 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121849414047 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178935837021 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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