I agreed that advertisement seem much better that they really are. A good business which make a good advertisement to seell their products. So good adveritesement return with a lot of money to the owner, it's should be perfect to make their job.
In my opinion i see a lot of products seem better in adveritesement than real, when i want to buy a perfume i tested it first at the store i smell it it was wonderful so i decided to buy it , i smell it again at home but there was a big difference from that at the store i asked many people about that .it was the same problem for all. Then i got the answer that when they make adveritesement to a perfume they made it more concentrated than others. To make it a good choice for us .
Second when they do adveritesement to sell home or building they will clean it deeply and they use different lights to contrast or focus on specific areas. I remembered when my family decided to buy a home , we saw adveritesement at the television, and it was amazing it was appear so clean , big and many other things. When we went to see it was so different from that on television.
Last but not least some adveritesement are fake other are reall it's depend ,but i think they should be reall to make people trust on them , and they recomended such products to friends or family ,moreover the buyers will be happy with the products, in addition there will be not return. And if they will be a reall the company will be famous and make a lot of money.there is a online shopping subscriber ,before a month ago i saw adveritesement of dress was cute, I decided to buy it after my long waiting it reached when i opened the shipping box i shocked with the bad quality of the dress in return when my friends ask me about the subscriber i dis recommend it.
In conclusion the adveritesement should be reall to gain a lot of buyers and their works will be increase.
- TOEFL Sample essay : integrated essay from TPO 10 70
- TPO17 integrated 70
- 5) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. 60
- TPO 1, Integrated Writing 70
- TPO 25, Integrated 70
advertisement seem much better that they really are.
advertisements seem much better than they really are.
A good business which make a good advertisement to seell their products.
A good business makes a good advertisement to sell their products.
Sentence: I remembered when my family decided to buy a home , we saw adveritesement at the television, and it was amazing it was appear so clean , big and many other things.
Description: The token was is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to was and appear
some adveritesement are fake
some advertisements are fake
it's depend
it depends
when my friends ask me about the subscriber i dis recommend it.
when my friends asks me about the subscriber i dis recommend it.
Sentence: A good business which make a good advertisement to seell their products.
Error: seell Suggestion: sell
Sentence: So good adveritesement return with a lot of money to the owner, it's should be perfect to make their job.
Error: adveritesement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: In my opinion i see a lot of products seem better in adveritesement than real, when i want to buy a perfume i tested it first at the store i smell it it was wonderful so i decided to buy it , i smell it again at home but there was a big difference from that at the store i asked many people about that .it was the same problem for all.
Error: adveritesement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Then i got the answer that when they make adveritesement to a perfume they made it more concentrated than others.
Error: adveritesement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Second when they do adveritesement to sell home or building they will clean it deeply and they use different lights to contrast or focus on specific areas.
Error: adveritesement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: I remembered when my family decided to buy a home , we saw adveritesement at the television, and it was amazing it was appear so clean , big and many other things.
Error: adveritesement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Last but not least some adveritesement are fake other are reall it's depend ,but i think they should be reall to make people trust on them , and they recomended such products to friends or family ,moreover the buyers will be happy with the products, in addition there will be not return.
Error: recomended Suggestion: recommended
Error: reall Suggestion: real
Error: adveritesement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: And if they will be a reall the company will be famous and make a lot of money.there is a online shopping subscriber ,before a month ago i saw adveritesement of dress was cute, I decided to buy it after my long waiting it reached when i opened the shipping box i shocked with the bad quality of the dress in return when my friends ask me about the subscriber i dis recommend it.
Error: reall Suggestion: real
Error: adveritesement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: In conclusion the adveritesement should be reall to gain a lot of buyers and their works will be increase.
Error: reall Suggestion: real
Error: adveritesement Suggestion: advertisement
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
Read a good grammar book.
Don't forget punctuation marks.
Don't put a space before punctuation marks.
Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-rater is sensitive.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 16 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1503 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.222 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.693 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 83 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.069 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.662 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.18 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5