Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In modern society, people are surrounded by technology all the time. By watching the muti-functional electronic---television, they can attach to everyday events and absorb new knowledge instead of other methods. Regarding this point, some people hold the opinion that watching television and movies negatively affect young people’s behavior, while others take the idea that TV and movies can have positive influence on young people. Personally, I incline to the view that TV and movies have more negative effects on young men. I’ll give two reasons in the following paragraphs.

Firstly, there are a lot unregulated movies or TV shows that are not suitable for young people to watch such as some violent videos and even porn videos, which can really change one’s mind and physical behaviors. However, most of the young people don’t understand these things and they’ll appear to have more interests on them and keep searching for more information. In this way, they’ll have tendency towards brutal scenes in order to seek for stimulation, and they might do something that they saw and learned from the videos which can be really terrifying and have serious consequences.

Another reason for my opinion is that watching TV really waste young people’s time and money. Despite of the bad sources on TV and movies, there are some advertisement that are eye-catching and novel. For example, my cousin Jem likes eating snacks, he seems to be interested in new snacks that showed in commercials. And mostly he would either go to the official website or using shopping apps to buy those snacks. By eating so much snacks, he not only waste his money but also become less healthy. And there’s one more case. My younger sister she watches TV for a long time recently. This is because she found out that her favorite animation will play on TV everyday after school. It was hard for her to stop watching TV and she started to refuse doing her school works. She also got nearsightedness apart from the negative effects that I said before. Thanks to TVs, young people are badly affected in different ways.

Base on reasons and details that I gave above, I can conclude that watching television and movies might lead to unexpected consequences and negative effects on physical and mental health, and is also a waste of time and money. It is better for us to utilize the time on more beneficial and advantageous affairs such as reading books or do sports. Therefore, watching TV truly have more negative effects.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... apps to buy those snacks. By eating so much snacks, he not only waste his money but...
^^^^
Line 5, column 670, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... her favorite animation will play on TV everyday after school. It was hard for her to st...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, really, regarding, so, therefore, while, apart from, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2126.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0619047619 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87338241983 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1822371162 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6363636364 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212242527226 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661137902527 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658254645271 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152667654506 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660818195272 0.0645574589148 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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