Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the invention of computers, Games played vital role in each children's live. Computer games are one of essential part of our life since it becomes an industry. Although many people believe that playing game and game industry have benefit for children, others think its adverse effect have more weight. From my vantage point, I concur with the latter group and the line will shed on my viewpoint.
First of all, playing game puts student's success in school at a disadvantage. There are many amazing game on computers and they attract not only kids but also even adults. Parents should limit playing games since student can harm their grade at the school if they play game long hours. Furthermore, game addition is harmful for kid's health. Some of games increase children's stress level and make them aggressive. Consequently, games harm not only success but also health.
Secondly, in addition the importance of doing well at classes, there is another subtle point which deserves some words. Boys and girl,especially in stage of learning new knowledge, ought to spend time with their friends at outside of home. According to the research study which conducted at MIT University by the team of reputable scientists, children who spend time with classmates tend to be more social than children who plays games. As a result, games alienate kids and make them less attractive. Moreover, some games, for example GTA vice city, encourage violence. Kids accept the game characters as a role model.
Wrap it up, one can conclude that computer games might harm the qualitiy of children's life. To forbid them untill certain age is the only solution. I think all parents should forbid or limit.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , especially
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 281.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03558718861 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49411104634 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.629893238434 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5845130185 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.4736842105 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7894736842 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73684210526 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253921337726 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742775046068 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435737515844 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149620604503 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279914494805 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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