In the modern era, the young generation is regarded as a crucial factor contributing to the thriving of the society. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the harshness of the typical behaviors in the community which each teenager has to adapt. Many people adhere to the view that these rules are fair and help us to bring order to society, while others believe these traditions have scores of awful influences on youth. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that these rules are severely tough and should not be applied. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that restricting youngsters deprive them of the opportunity of exploring their surrounding environment so that they can not gain sufficient experiences for their future because they are not allowed to. Consequently, they wind up not having enough self-esteem, or in excessive cases, they would suffer anxiety and depression. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a kid, my mother expected me to behave well in every situation. She did not realize that mistake is an inseparable part of human beings, especially children so that I was not given a second chance when I made a blunder mistake. As a result, I had low self-confidence which did not let me make the right decision in the dilemmas of my life because of my fear of its probable ramifications.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that these actions might bring entirely opposite results for the community. Freedom is one of the prominent desires of humans. So, restricting them to behave within the framework of specific laws might force them to act in the opposite ways. For instance, during high school, I had a friend who did not like school. However, his parents forced him into doing the homework and punished him if he did not do so. He could not confront them because they easily cut his allowance, so he decided to escape school during the day. He climbed off the wall of the school every day without anyone's notice; then, he went to the game center and spent his time there. Thus, the rules could not keep him in the classes.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that strict rules are not going to be influential for the teenagers in their lives. This is because we limit their chances to explore different behavior and chooses the best, and they could result in negative consequences.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: CHANCE_CHANGE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'changes'?
Suggestion: changes
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, then, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80630630631 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72970371349 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585585585586 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.380023458 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.619047619 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0673698724507 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0198203828504 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0210051718361 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0400252394515 0.150856017488 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224358303747 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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