Mostly, many people find their dream from a very early age. Therefore, we naturally see our parents’ jobs first. I think it is better to choose a job that is the same as our parents. I will tell you three reasons to support my opinion.
First, we can get information from parents. For example, my dream is to become a doctor, but I do not have much information about it, so it is very hard to prepare for university. Thus, in this case, if my mom or dad is a doctor, they can tell me how doctors work or what is the most important thing to be a doctor. Also, it allows for indirect experience.
Second, it can have personal connections. If dad is a businessman and my dream is also to be a businessman. In this case, I can more easily become it, because my dad's personal connection can help me. Also, they can give me some big information.
Last, it can stimulate us. When we are teenagers, we feel that our dreams are too far and sometimes think it is impossible. However, if some people have a job near you, you can think it is very close to you and have a hope to try it.
This is why I think It is better to choose a job that is the same as your parents. Of course, it is good to have the job you want, but if you do not have a dream or anything you are attracted to, it is also a good way to think about your parents’ job!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 52.1666666667 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1074.0 1977.66487455 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 264.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.06818181818 4.8611393121 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45393744808 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 212.727598566 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492424242424 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 348.3 618.680645161 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1911295662 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.1764705882 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5294117647 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258876184208 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843662841035 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100043089157 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165388512219 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136936654738 0.0645574589148 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.5 11.7677419355 47% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 58.1214874552 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.03 10.9000537634 55% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.23 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 86.8835125448 36% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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