Since dawn of civilization until modern times, traveling played crucial role in each society, human always want that seeing new place, learning new cultures before they die. A controversial question is recently raised about travelling, when people should travel when they are old or young? Some people adhere this idea and believe that individuals should travel when they are old and see different place, some others take radically different standpoint and claim individual should visit countries when they are young. I am with the former idea and line below will shed on light my viewpoint.
First of all, the foremost idea is coming to my mind id that people should travel because of economic reasons. The World has become more expensive place. Renting or housing price has skyrocketed compared to the last decades. Many of us have struggle make living. Needless to say that money means opportunities to travel. If people travel when they older they might save more deposit which they can spend on abroad. The more money they earn is the more place they can visit. They might also bring family with them.
Secondly, in addition to the importance of economic reasons, another imperative reason which deserves some word here is that human may more enjoy the travel aboard because of cultural achievement. As people get older their understanding cappacitiy is boosting. For instance, you can get different taste same book which you read different times. It goes without saying that healthy tourism is more useful than the other type of travel. According to a reputable research conducted of the MIT, it was found that older people who goes to SPA regularly have less blood pleasure than older who do not prefer to go. Even though the young do not prefer it, it might be helpful for older and give opportunities to go to different countries.
In conclusion, there are numerous reason which can be persuavie enough to corroborate my view. I highly recommend that travelling after 50 because economical and healty reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1098265896 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52177526016 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598265895954 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.5894450721 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233226901899 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691752781549 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765004171686 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120959608054 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735875070501 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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