There have been sayings that young people in the 21st century enjoy more freedom than their parents decades ago, and they have to be content with the life they already have. However, my observation prove the opposite. I believe that young people today have to obey far more stricter rules than the past generation, and that may be why today's society features a high suicide rate and a rapid increase of people with mental illness.
Students today have to obey intricate rules at school. These rules are designed to help the school have better control of students. As cell phones and social media are believed to distract a student from school work and sometimes even leads him to harm by exposing him to incorrect information, 80% of middle schools are banning the presence of cell phone at school, according to a recent George Mason University study. However, cell phones do bring convenience like helping students check unfamiliar words they encounter when reading, and connect them with their friends when they are planning an after-class discussion. The ban means young people will suffer unnecessary inconvenience at school. Moreover, as young people today see cell phones as a necessity in life, being told not to use them create a sense of distrust between the student and the school. Students feel that they are not treated as responsible individuals. This disappointment can sometimes lead to depression.
Young people at workplace also suffer over-strict rules. As it is believed that long hours' work can boost productivity, companies often require their employees to work as long as they can. Young workers, typically people in their 20s, are faced with the most unreasonable requirement of overworking. It is estimated that 50% young people in major cities like London and NewYork are required to work 100 hours per week--this means working 18 hours per day and six days per week. Few people disobey this compulsory rule, as being disobedience means loosing their jobs. This inhuman requirement is affecting the life of young people of this generation, as they have no time to exercise, which leads to feeble bodies, and they are frequently exhausted and over-stressful, which can cause serious mental illness in the long run.
In short, contrary to conventional impression, the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. The society should take action to change the status quo or the consequence will be seroiusl.
- Agree or disagree Nowadays it is not important for people to have regularly family meals together 83
- It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation 76
- Do you agree or disagree? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. 76
- tpo51--Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stricter' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stricter
...hat young people today have to obey far more stricter rules than the past generation, and tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66773641095 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553086419753 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9137433984 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.947368421 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3157894737 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.42105263158 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257332670016 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917681586879 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127064051374 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198190381602 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123918206196 0.0645574589148 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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