Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long term career of their life.
Seeking for different kinds of jobs for young fellows are like using varieties of colorful brushes for painting. As you could imagine, life originally is like a white paper but with the decoration of colors it turns out to be meaningful and wonderful. Young people should try many different kinds of jobs before they decide the long term career of their life, they finally a fascinating picture can be settled down.
Firstly, young people seeking different jobs can help themselves broaden views, gather experience and build a solid foundation for the future. Luckily, I could make myself as an example since recently I been finished my placement as an engineering intern in a company. Describing myself with the fact that even though it’s my third year in university but I actually started getting in touch with engineering software that I would never learn during uni period. Those skills which performed by seniors did actually broad my views, like how to drawing graphs to represent a construction site, as well as calculating fees by using a variety of software. Me fortunately could watch and gather a lot experience on how to implement a small project by using techniques I’ve been taught. Which I think this life career experience would dramatically help my future understanding of different jobs since I have built a solid foundation for myself. So much more does young people who seeking for many jobs.
Secondly, continue kind of sharing my internship experience, during those 30 days of my internship I was able to make several friends. These friends I made when we were made as a team and assigned to proceed a small project, communication went very well between everyone, happily and positively sharing ideas. I was like a lying lion before this taken place of internship I could never get chance to talk to strangers such more frequently, now I was awake and roaring out loudly about my ideas to others and earn definitely worth a respect. Therefore, if young people decide to try many jobs they are absolutely able to know more friends and earn respect of their ideas.
On the other hand, taking a long-term job as an individual’s first career can also be risky. A man easily gets uncomfortable from working because repeating same task is tedious, especially job only need monotonous actions rather than intelligent thinking. Therefore, choosing a long-term job as one’s first career is not so wise considering one lacks necessary information.
In conclusion, it is judicious to say that juveniles can benefit a lot by working in different jobs. Not only they are more prepared to stary a long-term job, but also they have the ability to make more wise decision and find their favorable jobs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, well, as to, i think, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2291.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02412280702 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8100441126 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554824561404 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3231629689 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.578947368 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332442951492 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100959779884 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138389547811 0.0737576698707 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188658194794 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121090853791 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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