When it comes to the issue the best way of life, some people believe that working for long hours and make more money allow us to have a better life. However, others think that we should pay more attention to our family. As far as I am concerned, te last point carries more weight. I take this position into account for the following reasons.
The first and most important reason is that the main aim of living is to enjoy it not make money. I think that there is not a better example than my experience when I was youngest. At that time, I had been working for ABS, an electronic company, as a manager for ten years. It required a lot of extra time. So, I have to decline my vacations and weekends for doing my obligations as best as possible. Of course, I admit that its high payments motived me to continue this trend. Although I hoped to make a comfortable life for my family, they annoyed of that situation. They consistently complain that I do not allocate enough time for them. Eventually, my wife left me. I now detected that I was seeking other employment to give me quality time with my family.
Another subtle point we must consider is that working for long hours decrease the laborers' proficiency. Latest findings demonstrate working for more than six hours per day can enhance the working faults for thirty percent. Therefore, you can gain more money by allocating much time a day for working, while you have to pay much for compensating your mistakes. I think that a small example can give some light on this issue. In modern countries, the teachers are not allowed to work more than twenty hours per week. Indeed, they know that a teacher will have the effective teaching for certain working time of a week. A teacher who works more than standard hours will feel tired and never could teach properly. In addition, teachers have to spend vacations with their family, because it refills them with fresh energy to continue their duties.
All above evidence supports this fact that we should devote more time for our family. Working for long hours can not help us to succeed in our business and life. Finally, I hope that people gain the deeper insight of the main goal of living.
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- Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Do you agree or disagree and give reasons and examples 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...e main aim of living is to enjoy it not make money. I think that there is not a bett...
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Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'laborers'' or 'laborer's'?
Suggestion: laborers'; laborer's
...hat working for long hours decrease the laborers proficiency. Latest findings demonstrat...
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Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Latest'.
Suggestion: The Latest
...ours decrease the laborers proficiency. Latest findings demonstrate working for more t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, i think, in addition, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58375634518 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38618098051 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53807106599 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7202020195 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.24 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.76 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0521033110084 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0148600155544 0.076458572812 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300432343643 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0268531068928 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245325753022 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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