Compared with older people, younger people have more opportunities to be physically active, because younger people are exposed to more laborious jobs usually. And accompanied by the prevalence of househeld robots and similar machines, retired people are deprived of the chance to be physically labored. Therefore, I think exercise is important to older people than younger people.
First and foremost, older people are supposed to exercise actively because they can keep healthy by strengthening their body. As people grow older, the flexibility of individuals degrade day by day. And without careful maintenance, the degrading could be accelerated by many factors, such as irregular meals, intensive drink and poor quality of sleep. However, if the older can exercise positively and frequently, the degeneration of organs and muscles could be slowed down, meaning exercising keeps the older live longer.
Moreover, older people, especially those retired, are deprived of the chance to do various work. Therefore, they could be mentally exhausted by the feeling of vacuity, loneliness and even anxiety. In this scenario, exercise is the best way to distract their attention. Exercise could release their mental stress by keeping the body moving. For example, my old grandfather could not stand the monotonous retired life, so he begins to climb the hill every weekend. In this way, he need not wait at home for newspaper delivery or boring TV shows. On contrary, he can enjoy the scenery on the hill.
Last but not the least, older people face one cruel fact that their close friends are either passing away or out of reach. However, joining some exercise clubs could help them meet new friends nearby. In spite of the sorrow of being alone, they could again find back the days with their friends. Just as aforementioned, my grandfather joins the local climbing club. There are many old people of his age as well as some young people. He finds his way back to a community where people share the same hobbies and work together to solve the problems. Not only does he find something to do, but also he actively participates the little society.
In conclusion, older people have limited chance to exercise and they need distraction that keeps them from the mental issues. They need exercise to make themselves look younger, which also offers them the chance to participate in the society again.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 484, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hill every weekend. In this way, he need not wait at home for newspaper delivery ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14833759591 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62366199784 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575447570332 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4215499292 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5217391304 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21739130435 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340090585856 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991332916049 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14969897217 0.0737576698707 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193497387479 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121377887231 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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