Essay topics: Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
2. Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.) Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples
Students are spending most important and fruitfull years of their lives in the university. They should exploit this golden time of their life. Some students enjoy participating in voluneer activities, and providing some services for citizens. However in this situation, I prefer to take some courses that is not directly related to my field of study. I feel this way, because this can help me in finding a good job in future, or helps me save money. besides, I can make some good friends.
These days companies are looking for very qualified persons who have many knowledge and ability. Hence, taking different courses can help me to improve my resume, and makes me more qualified to find a job. Maybe it is a bit difficult to attend classes that are not very close to my field of study, but I can see it as a good investment for my future. In addition, many jobs need different skills, for instance an architecture needs to know somethings about social beliefs and peoples notion. This courses absoloutely helps students to find a better job in future.
Besides, I can save money if I learn some thing more than units that are provided bu my academic courses. Recently many companies are advertising some workshops to learn some skills and abilities. There are many of them and virtually in any field. The registeration fee for this kind of workshops are staggering and students can not affort it. Hence I think these courses can help students to do not spend that money and learn useful techniques. I remember, last semester chemisterey faculity held a free class for all students in the campus. My major is Biology and I participated in that class. It saved me lots of money, because if I wanted to attend a workshop I should have paid lots of my monthly money. As you see, I could save a lot of money and spend it on more important things.
Another reason that deserves some words is that, I can find some good friends from other faculities. We usually meet our classmates and maybe some other students in other classes, but the Chemistery course that I talked about, made a great possibility to me to meet some other people from other faculities. I found one of the my best friends from that class. He was majoring in Chemical engeenring and we plan to found a new company after our graduation.
All in All, if my university gives me an opportunity to attend some courses other than my field, I never miss that great chance. I can use this opportunity to make me resume more powerful, save lots of money and also find some new frinds.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...d providing some services for citizens. However in this situation, I prefer to take som...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... this can help me in finding a good job in future, or helps me save money. besides, I can...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
... job in future, or helps me save money. besides, I can make some good friends. Thes...
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Message: You should probably use ''.
... make some good friends. These days companies are looking for very qualified persons ...
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Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ing for very qualified persons who have many knowledge and ability. Hence, taking di...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
...ing for very qualified persons who have many knowledge and ability. Hence, taking different co...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ely helps students to find a better job in future. Besides, I can save money if I lea...
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Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
... Besides, I can save money if I learn some thing more than units that are provided bu my...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ggering and students can not affort it. Hence I think these courses can help students...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'my'?
Suggestion: the; my
...e from other faculities. I found one of the my best friends from that class. He was ma...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...und a new company after our graduation. All in All, if my university gives me an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, look, may, so, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67184035477 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59622793807 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492239467849 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1740238387 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0384615385 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3461538462 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07692307692 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130696877999 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407345282511 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043957771628 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0764525168909 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177511283839 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.