The life expectancy of people has raised all across the world and we definitely owe it to the advancement in technology which has in turn improved the living conditions when compared to that from decades ago. The subsequent paragraphs explain the particular areas which have been positively affected leading to more life expectancy.
Firstly, the striking improvement in healthcare has direct impact on increasing the life expectancy of people. For example, we have found cures to different deadly diseases like chicken pox, plaque, polio which have caused great loss of life in the past. If it weren’t were the development of this medicines, these diseases would have been still prevalent leading to less life expectancy. Further, technology has helped doctors design safer and more sound operation procedures with better success rate. In particular, the process of human birth is the process which has improved the best with technology. It was a widely known fact that, during the pre-technology age, deliveries used to be very difficult and usually caused deaths to either the baby or the mother or both in some cases.
Secondly, with technology, industry has gained momentum, in turn leading to creation of many jobs for people. As a result, more people are now employed and getting salary which means they can afford daily basic requirements like food, medicine, proper housing, etc. This has a pivotal role in making people live longer. To elaborate, for instance, in the past, the phenomenon of people not being able to buy food leading to deteriorated living conditions and eventually early deaths is not rare. However now, situations like this, have relatively taken downward slope because of people having salaried works.
Moreover, it is also partly because of awareness in people, the life expectancy has increased. In other words, in many countries, there used to be many blind superstitious beliefs and practices which are in general detrimental, such things have decreased gradually with time. For example, having more number of off springs was considered a symbol of social status, while we all can agree how easily this can lead to over population and lack of food resulting in untimely deaths. All credit goes to the social awareness, such practices are almost vanished now resulting in people having enough food and living longer.
To sum up, in the light of aforementioned reasons, the causes of better life expectancy are advancement in technology leading to better living conditions and also because of general awareness in people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...it weren't were the development of this medicines, these diseases would have be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in general, in particular, as a result, in other words, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2603406326 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74536880283 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554744525547 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1643243384 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.111111111 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4444444444 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13858591864 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466911356946 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502506299308 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0813709596142 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319609446425 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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