If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

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If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

Submitted by shayanhgh on Wed, 10/25/2017 - 14:54

Throughout history, in all civilized societies, selecting a right job engendered copious controversies among people. Some people may hold the view that a secure job is essential for people. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that an appealing job is vital for human. As far as I am concerned, people should choose a satisfying job because not only can they progress, but also it helps them to enjoy their life.
The first reason worth mentioning is that an interesting job helps people to progress in their life. Nowadays, development in technology changes everything and become prosperous is arduous. To demonstrate, when a person select a job that like it, he allocate all his time on his job and try really hard to finish it. Also, your boss see this attitude of you and after a while suggest you a better job or maybe increase your wage. However, a person do not try correctly to perform his work if the job is not attractive to him. He only want to finish it fast and this might make a fatal or error in his work.
A further subtle point is that people enjoy their life. To illustrate, in this hectic life all people need to enjoy their life and there are many way to do this. On of this way is to execute a job that satisfy you. A person who working in a secure job, after a while get sick of his work and feel exhausted. So, he does not have any energy to doing his job. On the other hand, a satisfying job give a lot energy to person. For instance, a student that are working very hard on an arduous project never get tired because he enjoys spending his time like this and this situation leads to happiness in life. Hence, the life is not only about working and human must enjoy it to.
To make a long story short, based on aforementioned argument, due to progress in life and enjoy life, people prefer to choose a satisfying job rather than a secure job. Consequently, it is highly recommended that, people think about their life in a different way and select a job that help them to be happy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'allocates'.
Suggestion: allocates
... a person select a job that like it, he allocate all his time on his job and try really ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 534, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...e job is not attractive to him. He only want to finish it fast and this might make a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun way seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ways'.
Suggestion: many ways
... need to enjoy their life and there are many way to do this. On of this way is to execut...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 244, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ded that, people think about their life in a different way and select a job that help them to be h...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, while, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44919786096 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49574547185 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510695187166 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1959942535 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263550508294 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874479403343 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588762867893 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182838794011 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584809651048 0.0645574589148 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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