If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

I was born in my a small town called Ranchi in the eastern part of India. When i grew up in moved out of my town for higher education and better job prospects. Although i do not stay there anymore but i like to visit my hometown occasional to meet my parents and other relatives. Ranchi is a peaceful town with good schools and other facilities. However, few things have remained unchained since so many years.

One of the things that i would like to change in my home town is the poor drainage system. During rainy seasons there is water logging on the roads and it takes days for the pooled water to clear from the roads. This water gradually becomes muddy. Commuting becomes difficult during the rainy seasons, specially when the precipitation is heavy. The water which collects in the potholes on the roads becomes breeding ground from many infectious diseases such as dengue.

The rainy reason adversely affects the daily life. many schools have to remain closed, because the school bus service cannot function. People waste a lot of time in travel to their work. In general, every year the rainy season poses a serious threat.Even after the water is cleared, the potholes jeopardize driving on these irregular roads. One day my cousin met with an accident while he was coming back from work at night because he couldn't see a pot hole

The local authorities and the municipality seem to wake up only after the rain to mend the damaged roads.So many years have passed and the same problem repeats itself because the root cause is not rectified. It is about time that the government makes efforts to development new drainage in the city. I am planning to write a letter to the authorities to bring there attention towards this problem.

Technology has advanced and such kind of problem should not be existing in this era. There is no excuse for the State government for this negligence. This problem of bad drainage has prevailed since decade. Many non governmental organizations are trying to focus the attention of the government towards the issue and also raising public awareness towards the same. I really hope that my city has better drainage facilities next time i visit them

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, while, in general, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81002638522 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50364775892 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572559366755 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.7139022213 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8636363636 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2272727273 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22727272727 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0477535076828 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0148399151166 0.076458572812 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03787078128 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0243297632496 0.150856017488 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199362446858 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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