If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
It is indeed true that my hometown requires many changes. However, in my view it is crucial to rectify education system as a prerequisite to uplift economy of my hometown for two reasons. I would like to explore that in the following essay: To begin with, schools adapt very rigid rules and regulations and they do not allow students to exhibit their potential. Current education has limitations like one can not change your program once you entered in it. Read in newspaper one of the medical student was not able to clear his first year anatomy exam Because passing criteria was very high for him, so he wanted to change his career to finish his study on time and work at decent work to support his family financially. Unfortunately, no faculty paid attention to his needs and after trying five times he realized medicine is not for him; being depressed he committed suicide. Therefore, it is crucial to formulate rules and regulations considering standards for all students. However, developed countries like USA allow student to change program if necessary and evaluate students strengths and weaknesses before joining any specialized program. As a result, implementing flexible education system can magnetize more students to join the higher academic studies and show their creativity thus aid in boosting economy of my hometown . Secondly, many students needs recreation activities other than just bookish knowledge to enrich brain. Including sports in the curriculum opens up opportunities for passionate students. It is certainly true that leisure activities such as volley ball, foot ball, swimming and other sports games help to unwind mind from tedious homework activities. No one can ignore other myriad benefits of exercise and sports such as it enhances power of concentration, help to develop muscular strength and endurance and aid to generate revenue by arranging tournament. For instance, many colleges in United States of America offer their students playground, coach, tools required for games. Interested Students participate in sports activities and gain skills. Moreover, at the end of the year administrator arrange tournament games in order to create competition and to accumulate revenue from observers for college maintenance. Similarly, this change might revolutionize schools of my country academically and in extracurricular activities. To summarize, bringing changes in my native place school system such as allowing students to decide their career at any point and to organize sports activities as important lesson in schools offer concentrate benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2176.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93915004615 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6025 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7877216577 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.888888889 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10055556832 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030948991547 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557305204541 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10055556832 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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