It is generally accepted that smoking causes the deaths of large number of people. In order to address this problem governments should bans smoking in public places. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

We live in contemporary modern world, where smoking is considered as a trend
to enhance one's charisma. However, disastrous effects from acitve and passive
smoking can not be overlooked. I firmly agree with the statement government should impose
stringent rules especially ban or outrageous fine to eradicate the dangerous
effect of passive smoking on public. I would like to elaborate my point with
following reasons:

It is well known fact that passive smoking is considered equally harmful as
active smoking. For instance, when a person smoke a cigarette the nicotin
exhaled certainly inahled by people surrounding that area, including children.
However, nicotin deposition in lungs alveoli causes hardening of cell and thereby
reduces elasticity of lungs to expand. This can give rise of symptoms such as
troubled breathing, muscle pain, clubbing, cyanosis and interfere in the process of oxygenation.
Eventually, chronic exposure to these harmful gases may lead to lung cancer that is most
uncurable type of malignant cancer. As a result, to save life of innocent young
ones and individuals government should forbid smoking.

Another reasons that deserves attention creation of smoking free
environment can lead to awakening in youth. It is universal sayng,that
amateur adolsecents have higher proclivity to learn from surrounding
environment. However, they might not develop habit of smoking and free from
deadly dieases. For example, last when week I went to a restaurant named Cheesecake
factory, I saw a board of no smoking hanging on a wall. People strictly followed
that in order to maintain camaraderie and after realizing about adverse effects, as it also
included ill effects cause from smoking. This is certainly initiative step by owner
to create healthy atmoshphere for all consumers.Thus, by formulating necessary
rules andregulations government can deter people from developing
obsession with smoking.

In conclusion, government should bann smoking in places such as parks, restaurants, office and other tourist
attractions places to plummet the number of people suffering from malignant type of
lung cancer

Votes
Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Independent TOEFL Writing

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.74153846154 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94404785142 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627692307692 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4650815676 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.625 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.53405017921 595% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188183676551 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575345957823 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431740665367 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0448472813651 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456687574374 0.0645574589148 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 10.9000537634 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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