It is more important to keep old friends than It is to make new friends.
The majority of the old friends that the people have are their good friend. They like their friend and they think by having them they do not need to find any new friend. In my opinion, although old friends are valuable, finding a new friend can be valuable, too.
The first reason is that the situation of the people in not constant. They will go to a new place during their life such as work, school, and university or in another city or country. So, in the new place, they need to find a new friend to get a help from them.Even, they need to have a relationship there. For instance, when I was a freshman in university, I was alone. I did not have any friend because my old friend went to other universities. So, I needed to find a new friend. Therefore, my university's friend became one of my good friends. Accordingly, people need and should to find a new friend when they enter to a new place.
The second reason is that finding new friends can be an extra experience in people life. New friend; especially from either other cities or other countries, can give us additional information about their culture and others. A person who is successful can be really useful for a person's future. He/ she can introduce them to the important people that can cause an improvement in their job and others. For instance, I found a new friend from another country. His field of the study is same of my field. So, he took new information to me about their universities, professors, job condition. That information helped me a lot to choose the best university and a professor. Hence, new friends are a new experience that people can see in their life.
In conclusion, although keeping old friends are important, finding new friends is really useful for people to have a new experience.
- Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. 70
- TPO-5 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. 73
- The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. 73
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 73
- The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...of the old friends that the people have are their good friend. They like their frie...
^^^
Line 2, column 261, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
...nd a new friend to get a help from them.Even, they need to have a relationship there...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, hence, if, really, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56875 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67475904289 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440625 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.0852431328 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.619047619 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2380952381 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284880482693 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103637395304 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080622684449 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221364790257 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537139654009 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.63 10.9000537634 79% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.45 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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