With the advent of modernization and globalization, people have accomplished great achievements in order to make the world a better place to live. Our society nowadays has witnessed and experienced a radical change in many aspects ranging from computer, science, manufacture, and advanced stuff. So, it is not hard to say that technology is creating a single world culture. I will elaborate upon my standpoint through two thoughtful pieces of evidence.
The first significant point to be mentioned is that the improvement of the technology, the internet play a pivotal role in communication among people which has resulted in single world culture. The internet facilitates communication among people especially overseas people. So, they can share ideas, opinion, thoughts together which make one culture learns from others that makes the single world culture. I will give my personal experience as an example; I use Facebook to contact many students through Facebook. A friend of mine named Mariam, who is living in the U S A, works as part-time to pay her tuition to lessen their economic parents' burden. She explained for me the merits and demerits of working as a part-time while she is studying. In my country Egypt, all the kids depend on their parents until they got a job after they graduate. But, when, I thought genuinely on that perspective; I figured out it is beneficial. Thus, I started to talk to my parents about this because I wanted to apply this issue to my life to be reflective. They refused that issue at the beginning, however, after that they accepted. I started to work as part-time at shop- store. It was an essential experience for me; I taught me to be independent, and also my friends began to apply this perspective on their life when they saw the positive outcome from that job. As you can see, this a concert example to illustrate sharing the ideas, and communication through the internet bring the world together.
Another salient point in corroborating with my stance is that We are entering a new of explosive information. We absorb a lot of information on an hourly basis, the TV held to inform us with many news through many channels. The news contains reports from foreign cultures of a particular country, from social manners to religious ritual, from language to food. Therefore, all of this news would help us to build-across culture understanding, and their thought will be flexible to change especially when we face cultural diversity in a future career or study abroad. So, Channels all over the world are broadcasting programs, and people are accessing more international channels l I read an article from the science departments, it is stated that the TV and the information on the internet open the people's eye to a new world, nowadays, they know everything about the other countries. I will give my father's experience as a compelling example, two years ago my dad has a chance to work a leading hospital in Canada, he was so scared to accept the opportunity because he might face a new environment. However, the other co-worker encouraged him to take the chance. He spent like one weak to read about the culture, traditions, does and don'ts there, and he listened to many news programs talking about the life in Canada; he watched many videos to acknowledge him the accent of Canada's language. Within that period, he was familiar with everything. As a result, he succeeded in that job. From what I mentioned, the TV and internet information played a dramatic role to familiarize your self with the other culture.
In conclusion, to make a long story short, these types of communication technology have brought people from all over the world closer together. People these days have more opportunities to share ideas and information. In this way, they are coming under the same cultural influence. So, a single world culture is being created.
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- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 88
- TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people 73
- peole living longer today 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...ly basis, the TV held to inform us with many news through many channels. The news contain...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... accessing more international channels l I read an article from the science depar...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e might face a new environment. However, the other co-worker encouraged him to ta...
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Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...oes and donts there, and he listened to many news programs talking about the life in...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...oes and donts there, and he listened to many news programs talking about the life in Cana...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 52.1666666667 192% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3244.0 1977.66487455 164% => OK
No of words: 654.0 407.700716846 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96024464832 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91352259989 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 330.0 212.727598566 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504587155963 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 1023.3 618.680645161 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.59856630824 271% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4435398862 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.375 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4375 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12519559486 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346436420718 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666692339724 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934159140842 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045123976634 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 168.0 86.8835125448 193% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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