Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
In the modern era, the television has become an inevitable part of each home, so affects individuals, families and society as a whole. In this regard, one of the controversial questions which has caused heated debates is whether the effect of TV programms on a youngster's behavior is positive or negative as an overall. While other people might have a different opinion, I strongly contend that the negetive influence of movies and TV shows on youngsters overweigh their positive's. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two remarkable reasons.
First and foremost, TV programs makes some immoral behaviors normal to the youth of a society; thus, cause them not to follow some ethical rules in their behaviors similarily. Generally speaking, movies and television programs are often concentrated on the social issues, some of which totally centers around unethical acts, such as envy, betrays, affairs, to name just a few. under this great amout of focus on these kinds of behavioral patterns which could be seen in almost all TV shows, youngsters imagine them in their life. It goes without saying that after a while of being exposed to these stuffs, their mind found these attitudes and posibilities as normal patterns, which are acceptable to be taken for their own behavior, unconsciously. This way of thinking and being okay with immoral acts, indeed, makes them similar to movies' characters who behave unethically; thus, deteoriate their quality of behave in the social medium and community to a great extent.
Secondly, most of movies and shows are within a luxurious life-style and as it might not be achievable by a young individual, it leads him to reactions based on nervous and disappointed feelings. Psychologically speaking, one of the main goals of producing movies is about making money. As a result, the producers of these products do their best in order to make the film as eye-catching as possible, and show unimaginable life-style, like colossol palaces as living places for handsome boys, is one of the best approaches in achieving this culmination. What would a youngster who is at the first stages of his journey of life would think when he observes one in his age in such a prosperity and tranquility of live? This is obviously not favorable nor motivating for him, as he imagine never could reach that level of life. Consequently, he would be under a great amount of pressure and tension of "if-else"es of his own life, results in a sadness, full of negetive emotion, agressiveness, and jealousy. This is the case which he acts and behaves agressively in contract with other people in society.
To sum up, taking all the aforementioned notions into consideration, I firmly believe that the advantages caused by the movies and shows on young people's way of behaving pales in comparison to its demerits
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- TPO44 Task2 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
...whether the effect of TV programms on a youngsters behavior is positive or negative as an ...
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Line 1, column 540, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two remarkable reasons. First and forem...
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Line 2, column 377, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Under
..., betrays, affairs, to name just a few. under this great amout of focus on these kind...
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Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the movies') or simply say ''most movies''.
Suggestion: most of the movies; most movies
...community to a great extent. Secondly, most of movies and shows are within a luxurious life-s...
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Line 3, column 779, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put before the verb 'imagine'.
Suggestion: never imagine
...favorable nor motivating for him, as he imagine never could reach that level of life. Consequ...
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Line 3, column 779, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'imagines'.
Suggestion: imagines
...favorable nor motivating for him, as he imagine never could reach that level of life. C...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, such as, as a result, to sum up, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0593220339 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99546003314 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555084745763 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.0238005637 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.470588235 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7647058824 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155331271875 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464705630331 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530151379651 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106919999837 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535702773072 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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