Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the
way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an unquestionable fact that today we have an opportunity to spend less time on cooking. At the same time, there is no unanimous opinion about aftermaths of this change and some of our contemporaries assume that it has negative consequences on our health and lives, however, as far as I am concerned the positive aftermaths, which will be discussed in details below, definitely outweigh the negative ones.
Probably, the most obvious advantage of the change is the fact that today we have to spend less time on cooking. In fact, one hundred years ago an average woman had to spend hours on the kitchen to feed her children and husband, a process of preparing food was tedious and long, for instance, to made a coup she ought to find all ingredients, wash, chop and boil them and it is the only first step of the process. By contrast, today we can buy a frozen pizza, put it in a microwave and dinner is prepared.
Moreover, an opportunity to prepare food swifter than it used to be has a deep impact on role of woman in European society. Perhaps, this change has made female and male more equal. Preparing food used to require from a person to have expertise and knowledge about the field and woman was an embodiment of it, as a result, males tended to associate their wives with this occupation, fortunately, today when no particular skills are needed to prepare modern food and children as well as men may buy food at store and quickly prepare it, women's role has stopped to be limited by the kitchen and they have more time which they can devote to their own business.
Of course, some of us are prone to see negative effects of the change on our society and particularly health. A part of population believes that preservatives used in such a type of food causes harm to your health. However, this belief has no valid evidence at least as far as I know. Moreover, some scientists who are specialized at food preservation maintain that modern food are much safer than it used to be in particular because of the specially created preservatives which guarantee that food will be not suddenly spoiled.
In conclusion, today we live in the world when everyone can buy food which can be easily prepared without usage of special tools or knowledge. Although many of us tend to underestimate the importance of this change, I profoundly believe that it has changed our society in many ways and allowed men and women become equal.
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Comments
Hello.
Hello.
Is my main problem with content or with grammar?
What should I change to enhance the score.
Thank you.
p.s. I was not sure that I can speak about role of woman because I want to be politically correct in my essay but my opinion seems to be obsolete. Will I be punished for such ideas in the real exam?
1. You have good content and
1. You have good content and ideas, and there are no big issues for grammar. You need more polished sentences.
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2. No, there is no problem.
Sentence: In fact, one hundred years ago an average woman had to spend hours on the kitchen to feed her children and husband, a process of preparing food was tedious and long, for instance, to made a coup she ought to find all ingredients, wash, chop and boil them and it is the only first step of the process.
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Sentence: In fact, one hundred years ago an average woman had to spend hours on the kitchen to feed her children and husband, a process of preparing food was tedious and long, for instance, to made a coup she ought to find all ingredients, wash, chop and boil them and it is the only first step of the process.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
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No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
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No. of Words: 431 350
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