Many events are occuring around the world, and many of these events have no impact on our life since we are living far apart from their origin. These events in science, economy, and politics are providing some roadmaps for the people around the world, and the events can provide sufficient experience for them in their way toward success. Also, there occurs many catastrophic events around the world that can be the basement for many scientific analysis for the behavior of the people before, during, and after them. This, also, provides sufficient knowledge that can help the governers in retrospecting the future events in their own country. Therefore, in my view it is important to be aware of the events that is happening around the world, even though these events have no direct influence on our life.
Wandering in the internet, many of us spend a lot of time each day to see the lattest events in the world. Many of these event relates to the science and economy which help the people around the world to use them in their own business plan. For example, many business managers in Iran can look at the economy boost in the South Korea and its large facilities, such as LG and Samsung to learn the fastest way that these infrastructures followed to be successful buisness plans. Wandering in the internet is useless and time consuming only when those informations that we are looking at are irrelevant, and cannot be implemented in our own countries.
In addition, many events, such as catastrophic ones, around the world are providing a touchstone for people and governors for forespecting their future need in confronting with them. For instance, one month ago, I have seen a news about a horrible earthquake in Japan which was above the common seismic records in strength. However, according to the further news, I have realized that noone was even wounded in that earthquake. This may cause the governers to think of some possible question. What caused this country to reduceits number of casualties to this extent? Is there any practical solution for our country that can simulate the same plan? Despite these events are occuring far from ouer host country, we have the same problem with catastrophis events such as earthquakes, Thus, the final result of thuis analysis can cause better preparation for future events.
In conclusion many events are occuring around us that have no effect on our today's life, but they can affect the future of the individuals and even countries. Following and analysing the successful plans in these events, can prepare people better for their business plan or even common the catastrophic events.
- The passage states some doubt 80
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 76
- Small businesses need many conditions in place in order to thrive: 66
- Small businesses need many conditions in place in order to thrive: 73
- In many countries people who are working are very more respectful comparing to the sedentary people who rely on the other citizens for their own problems. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this event' or 'these events'?
Suggestion: this event; these events
...he lattest events in the world. Many of these event relates to the science and economy whic...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...or instance, one month ago, I have seen a news about a horrible earthquake in Japan wh...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2206.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96846846847 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59784971611 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481981981982 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8333003822 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.555555556 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0158894853172 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00829537304648 0.076458572812 11% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0247915137038 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00955869436415 0.150856017488 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00965242484088 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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