People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Considering the condition of today’ hectic life, needless to say, travelling is the most effective of entertainments that people can enjoy now to cope with their problems. Every one of us might have a different view when being asked whether it is more beneficial for us to travel inside the country or to travel abroad. Although each of them has its own cons and pros, I concur with those who hold that travelling within the country is more preferable than travelling to out of it. To substantiate my points of view, two compelling reasons are being elaborated in the following essay.
To begin with, travelling abroad provides us with a great opportunity to gain insight into the culture and lifestyle of other countries such as various cuisines, folk dialects and languages, garments and so on. Thanks to the cheap public transportation systems like subways and buses in all countries, most people have readily travelled all over their country, which has resulted in familiarity with the culture of their country. Not only that, but the widespread existence of internal media give rise to people have achieved to the sufficient awareness about the culture of their country. therefore, no longer is travelling inside the country so appealing for people as there is nothing new to know. As a result of this, in order to be familiar with the culture and civilization that we are not adequately aware of them, it is better for us to travel outside of the country.
Secondly, some countries have a land of varied natural landscapes that cannot be found in our own country in my opinion, which means that getting in touch with such a nature makes a sense of delight that cannot be enjoyed anywhere. My own experience can clearly clarify what I mean. Last year, when I couple with my friend had supposed to travel in our vacation, our friends offered Peru, which contains a tropical forest, some of the highest mountains in the world and even pristine beaches-all within close proximately to each other. As our country is just a desert place and does not have such varied landscapes, we decided to travel to where our friends suggested. It was the most unprecedented trip that I have ever experienced. Had I travel inside the country, I would not enjoy it so much.
In a nutshell, having considered the reasoning and examples mentioned above into account, I maintain that travelling abroad overweigh travelling inside the country. Not only does travelling outside the country make the opportunities to be familiar to the various culture of other countries, but it also brings about enjoying varied fascinating landscapes that have never been experienced.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 591, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ess about the culture of their country. therefore, no longer is travelling inside the cou...
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Line 5, column 741, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'traveled', 'travelled'.
Suggestion: traveled; travelled
...rip that I have ever experienced. Had I travel inside the country, I would not enjoy i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, i mean, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98426966292 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77468855981 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516853932584 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.9030935999 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.470588235 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1764705882 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297675094024 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103427039659 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687240731515 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200722524923 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636097091363 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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