In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many issued about the medical problem are caused by junk food, and the government has the solution to change human think about junk food by including tax for it. However, both parties have their reason to the argument whether expensive junk food will give more beneficial for human or not.

To begin with, the communities, especially who live in the city, are compelled to being ready as possible. There is not enough time for people who work in the busy field. One thing that can be minimized on the people schedule is when they get a meal, and the junk food opens the solution to cut-down time. For example, the businessman has density schedule, sometimes, he forgets to get breakfast in the morning, and the junk food is readiness.

On the other hand, something which relates to the human health shall be managed, and this problem will be the government role. The tax will realize the human no to spend too much money to eat junk food, especially in the free day, because the massed shall have time to make a meal. Hopefully, by the tax, the medical problem caused by the junk food decrease to a significant number. There is some research about junk food will issue such as the minimum number of nutrient and many medical reports caused by it. This statement is supported by the data about the cancer disease increase as the same as the number of outlets that sell food in ready to eat package.

In conclusion, fast food will provide human to always eat in the business day. But, this kind of meal shall be decreased in consumption because many medical histories are caused by fast food. And the tax has the role to realize the human about this danger.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64646464646 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32923150671 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505050505051 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6412447187 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5714285714 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253939991264 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980233505744 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432827699469 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163724080668 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052530382121 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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