These days, many students have their job to satisfy their financial needs. There is an argument about students having a job: Some people say it is harmful for students, but others say it is helpful for them. I agree with the latter statement. I have two reasons about this which I will explore here in my essay.
To begin with, if students have their occupation and work, they can fulfill their monetary aspect. After they work, they receive their salary. Thus, they can buy what they want with the money. Moreover, they can also aid their family on the economic part. I have a good example about this. When my father was young, he had part-time job for his future and also he supported his family as well. He said although his salary was little, it was helpful for him in many ways such as his future and fund.
Next, students can also earn experience about society and have responsibility through their vocation. They can feel and empathize with their parents’ hard life. Additionally, there are many things to learn about the reality of social life. For instance, they can emulate how to deal with other people, and how to be more polite to them.
In conclusion, I believe that there are more benefits for student clearly. First, they can earn money and satisfy their economy for themselves or their family. Second, they can emulate responsibility by having experience in socializing with other people on their job.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an argument about students having a job: Some people say it is harmful for studen...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...which I will explore here in my essay. To begin with, if students have their oc...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...n my father was young, he had part-time job for his future and also he supported hi...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...many ways such as his future and fund. Next, students can also earn experience ...
^^^
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, and how to be more polite to them. In conclusion, I believe that there are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1187.0 1977.66487455 60% => OK
No of words: 247.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80566801619 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37345048882 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562753036437 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0744857343 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.9444444444 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7222222222 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15715642779 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622222245997 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454888374104 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108953151719 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393735674476 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an argument about students having a job: Some people say it is harmful for studen...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...which I will explore here in my essay. To begin with, if students have their oc...
^^^
Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...n my father was young, he had part-time job for his future and also he supported hi...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...many ways such as his future and fund. Next, students can also earn experience ...
^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, and how to be more polite to them. In conclusion, I believe that there are ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1187.0 1977.66487455 60% => OK
No of words: 247.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80566801619 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37345048882 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562753036437 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0744857343 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.9444444444 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7222222222 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15715642779 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622222245997 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454888374104 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108953151719 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393735674476 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.