A controversial debate is often raised about employees entitled for promotion. Some groups of people may hold the view that organisation should promote employees based on performance. Others may hold a different view and feel that employees should promote employees based on seniority. From my vantage point, I concur with the latter groups of people for the reasons I address in the following essay.
The first exquisite reason to be mentioned is that senior employees who are not promote lose productivity. Promotion is a motive for employees to excel in their work and be more productive. However, if juniors were given a priority over seniors for promotion, then the seniors would lose their self esteem, lose trust, and the confidence in their abilities. Thus, the overall performance of the organisation would decline. A vivid example to illustrate my view point is the experience I had in previous organisation where the manager promoted newly hire employees instead of promoting the senior ones. Most employees were not satisfied with the management and the overall productivity of employees decline.
However, there are some other drawbacks of promoting employees based on performance and no on seniority. No one person including executives has all the answers, especially in today's complex environment, but one thing that everybody agrees on is that promoting juniors over seniors create internal conflict between employees. In other words such an act would create differences between team members as a result, they lose synergy and stop acting in a team spirit. This eventually lead to the failure of achieving the organisational goals.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first to cross my mind, they are by no means the only reasons available. In the fact there is another subtle reason available. The noteworthy, refreshing, intelligible results of a study published in the business week Journal which showed the organisations favoring promoting employees based on performance and not on seniority are more likely to fail. The result of the study was conducted on 120 organisations in different sectors to prevent any bias.
To wrap up, contemplating the aforementioned reason, one soon realizes that organizations promoting employees based on seniority are able to create a greater harmony between their teams. In addition, they outperform other organizations because they have more satisfied employees.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 81, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'promoted'.
Suggestion: promoted
...ed is that senior employees who are not promote lose productivity. Promotion is a motiv...
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Line 4, column 89, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ting employees based on performance and no on seniority. No one person including e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, then, thus, in addition, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44444444444 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04273749258 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521164021164 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2458288352 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.9 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165170967179 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581304482409 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752987506454 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10026057026 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320412092147 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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