With the advent of technology, smartphones have been a magnificent invention and they have become a major part of our day to day life. Some parents forbid their children for owning the smartphone, but I disagree. In my view, they are a boon rather than a curse and I feel in this way for the undermentioned reasons.
To begin with, smartphones has facilitated the communication in an tremendous manner. Face to face communication has revolutionized the era. In past, we talked for limited hours and voice hearing was only thing possible. But nowadays, we can hear as well as see the person residing far from us. My own experience stands as a compelling example for this. I did my school from Maos boarding school in India. That was the first time I stepped out of my house and moved away from my parents. They were quite distressed and missed me a lot initially. I utilized my smartphone to communicate with them regularly. It became possible to interact with them face to face and we felt like we are sitting beside each other. This is how the situation was alleviated and my parents were satisfied to see me happy in front of them. Just hearing their voice and watching them on phone drains out my stress of the entire day. This is not possible without smartphones and that’s how the world is connected together and our loved ones are one click away.
Secondly, smartphones have furnished us with the functionality to learn and educate ourselves more effectively. Without internet in our phones it was cumbersome to study anywhere and anytime in a handy manner. Although we have facilities of laptop or computers in library but having a smartphone in our hand makes it easier to study promptly and without prior planning of going to the library. Moreover, they have made online learning possible and at our own mood and pace. For instance, during my school days I had a passion for dancing and I was so determined to pursue my career as an actor in movies. However, I had to attend classes alongside my passion because my parents always wanted me to complete school first and they fulfil my dreams as well. We had the provision to take classes online. That’s why I was able to manage my dance classes in the morning and watch the online session in the evening. Many a times we had breaks during the classes and instead of wasting time I used to learn on my cell phones because I had all the lectures downloaded. They were of great help for passing the exams. All in all, smartphones assists us to gather knowledge and learn in an efficient manner.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that if the smartphones are used in a positive manner that it’s negatives can be outweighed. As I said above, they can be used for keeping in touch with the loved ones and also for making learning flexible according to our own pace.
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- What is your approach to problem-solving, and how it works for you?Use specific details to support your response? 76
- "At present, Mason City residents seldom use the nearby Mason River for any kind of recreational activity, even though surveys of the region's residents consistently rank water sports (swimming, fishing, and boating) as a favorite form of recreation. Sinc 46
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an tremendous manner" with adverb for "tremendous"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...hones has facilitated the communication in an tremendous manner. Face to face communication has revolut...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...es has facilitated the communication in an tremendous manner. Face to face communi...
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Message: Did you mean: 'In the past'?
Suggestion: In the past
...mmunication has revolutionized the era. In past, we talked for limited hours and voice ...
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...umbersome to study anywhere and anytime in a handy manner. Although we have facilities of laptop ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a time' or simply 'times'?
Suggestion: a time; times
...the online session in the evening. Many a times we had breaks during the classes and in...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient manner" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ssists us to gather knowledge and learn in an efficient manner. In conclusion, I strongly believe t...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive manner" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...elieve that if the smartphones are used in a positive manner that it's negatives can be outweig...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing flexible according to our own pace.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67664670659 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71617159567 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508982035928 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2425264676 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7931034483 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.275862069 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93103448276 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156044697456 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444395657515 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454072884324 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113492931565 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032378729798 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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